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[crystal12345]

i,m writing about a fox who lost his dad, but he doesn't know his mom does. She doesn't want to tell him that because she doesn't want him to be sad. So she has to make something up. Problem is i don't know what she can say. Any ideas?

[excelsior]

could she tell him that he has been captured and taken to a zoo far away?

[Ice.Maiden]

What age group is the story geared for?

[excelsior]

forget that ... i did not read your question thoroughly enough .... sorry

[crystal12345]

this takes place in the woods and the baby fox heard the gun shot, The age group for this story is 13+

[Ice.Maiden]

I could have a think on this one for you. If it was for younger children, then I'd have no difficulty in making a few suggestions, as I've written stories for my own children since they were old enough to understand.

[crystal12345]

its only 13+ because it talks about death

[Ice.Maiden]

Fair enough, I take your point. However, when a grandparent passed away, and my eldest son was asking about what'd happened, and why, I concocted a fairy story which included the subject, but put it in such a way that it left him with hope. I told him that this other person's grandad was whisked away to the moon, and there he'd remain for evermore, to eat all the cheese that he loved so much! My son thought it was brilliant, and used to stare out at the moon himself, asking if HIS grandad was there!! It worked, until he was old enough to appreciate that things live and die, as part of the natural order of things.

[crystal12345]

thanks ice maiden but what if the son says then why did i hear a gunshot or noise as he is going to put it?

[Ice.Maiden]

I don't know how far you are with the story, but perhaps the gunshot could be passed off as just having frightened father fox away - so junior goes off to find him. During his travels, he has a few adventures, until the young fox has grown up a bit. Then maybe he could witness birds being shot at by a farmer, and the sound reminds him of what he once heard - so the realisation dawns on him, and he learns a lesson in life? Goodness - it's set me off now! I love writing!!

[crystal12345]

actully he is going to hear it later when he makes friends and right now I'm om chapter one. His friends are going to be a bunny and a squril. A hunter is also in this story and he is going to meet him and find out he killed his dad.

sorry of the spelling mistakes

[Ice.Maiden]

Something on those lines sounds fine - no pun intended! You can either make the story have a moral tale to it, or leave the reader with questions that they might like to ask themselves. The important thing is for the story to have a point, with a beginning, a middle and an end. Also, the first paragraph - if not the first few lines, should be enough to grab the reader's attention. Hope it all comes easily to you!

[crystal12345]

thank you very very very very very very very much. i don't know what i would have done with out you.

[Ice.Maiden]

Write a second chapter? LOL! Good luck with it. I've written a few things which've been published so I know a BIT of what I'm talking about, but when my children are older, writing books is something I'm going to do - so hope you manage it.

[crystal12345]

ice maiden? If you are still there . What books do you write? So i can read them of course.