Does These Sentences Make Sense To You?

[PedramT]

I'm using these sentences on my essay. since English is my second language I don't know if they make sense or are grammatically correct.

Being told that someone with a greater power is
up in the skies made me as a child to believe in many other things that I heard.
Ghosts, vampires, and monsters are few of the things that took me a while to
get over with. Me being told about God was the source of all paranormal beliefs
that were burning me inside. A fire that took years to extinguish.

[murraymints]

Being told that someone with a greater power is in the skies, led me , as a child, to believe in many other things that I had only heard of.
Ghosts, vampires and monsters are a few that took me a while to accept.
Being told about God became the starting point of all my paranormal beliefs ,which I felt strongly about.. a belief that took many years to die away.

[bhg481]

As murraymints but I would drop the comma after "skies".

[murraymints]

yup..you're right..

[mikey4444]

I would also ditch the "me"

[bhg481]

I wouldn't.

[bhg481]

Incidentally, the title should be "Do these sentences....".