Any thought on this please in the light of present situation

[keyplus90]

Violence

Violence is spreading like spilt blood,
Roughly hurting kindness.
Violence is spreading,
Spreading slowly and darkly through other people.
Violence is brutality,
Ticking slowly,
In the wind.
Violence is lightning,
Breaking the darkness,
But violence doesn't get scared ,
The people who spread it are cowards,
Will it stop as the darkness fades away?


Written by a 10 years old
Hounslow Town Primary School

printed in "a pocketful of Rhyme, imagination for a new generation"
the 2006 poetry competition for 7 - 11 years olds.

[naomi24]

Although I think the piece is the product of a very intelligent mind - it's excellent - like Wiz, if my child wrote that, I'd be worried. Coming from a small child, I find it very sad, and I have to wonder just what influences he or she is exposed to.

[Quinlad]

Kids today. Tut.

They submit a poem to a book called 'A Pocketful of Rhyme'. And the poem they submit doesn't even rhyme.

Declining standards.

[code1]

While I applaud this childs use of idiosyncratic thoughts and ideas, I cannot help but stop wondering where all this is going...

Life in the UK is taken up with a daily tally of stab victims...society has changed, gone are the days of leaving your back door open and your kids going for walks in the woods.

Perhaps we should encourage all our young adults to express themselves through the powers of prose, lets start listening to the words and thoughts and reading between the lines.

[keyplus90]

I liked the views and few are exactly what I thought.

I am proud to say that he is my own Son. I did not say that initially because I wanted to see people�s reaction to the thought. Reason I decided to put it here was that I wanted the views of few intelligent people here, I am glad to say that response is what I thought, Why a 10 year old will write something like this It made me think as well and I asked him, "News on TV" he said. Plus I know in those days one of his very close school friends was shot dead by his own father. That must have contributed to this immensely.

[Quinlad]

Do have a word with him about the rhyming thing though.

[keyplus90]

I did. And I asked him that how he got this idea, if he is ok at school,

He said "daddy why all the kids were laughing when we heard about Perry being shot dead. Its not a joke he was my friend and a nice boy".

I said to him whatever I could, that he should not be worried about others, and I am happy with what he did and how he thought about that. But now he should leave it as one of those bad things you have to see or go through in your life as you grow.

Since then he has almost forgotten about it but he is into reading books, writing stories himself. And I am glad that in his school his name has been put into some sort of "Special talent" register, which he tells everyone. His teacher spoke to me last year and said that his thinking about everything is very mature so we need to keep an eye on him. So I do. I usually take him seriously.

[code1]

Your VERY VERY lucky to have a thoughtful and kind son...

The poem is in my opinion really is a fantastic example of how the power of the written word can cause such reacation.

If more people expressed their own pesonal views then perhaps others would sit up and listen.

Please never assume that there is " anything" wrong with a child that writes anything other than the norm.

God Bless

[keyplus90]

Thanks for the Code-

Good thing is that when you read that book which is about 150 pages then most of the kids have written stuff like, ba ba black sheep and twinkle twinkle little star. Then these words stand out more. That is what his teachers said as well.

[naomi24]

Keyplus, you have a very bright and talented little lad there, and you have every reason to be proud of him. Well done him!

[keyplus90]

Thanks Naomi - I am sure he would be glad to read all this, so far he has no idea that I put his poem here.

[keyplus90]

Thanks Wiz - He likes writing things. He has his own kind of a diary.

He wants to become a Brain Surgeon. Since he was about 6 he always said that he wanted to become Doctor. I hope its not Dr Who.

[R1Geezer]

you have a bright lad there. Try to avoid brainwashing him with religion.

[keyplus90]

Thanks for your nice advice Geezer. I will give it a go. Perhaps I already am.

[lajohn]

Sounds to me like this child is more understanding, knowledgeable and aware of what going on. I wish him all the best and much success in lifetime and studies.

[jake-the-peg]

There are a number of events, summer schools and the like available to kids on these registers but some schools are not really very clued up about them

read here:

http://ygt.dcsf.gov.uk/HomePage.aspx?stakehold er=14

[keyplus90]

I want to thanks to all the people who gave their valuable comments. And I showed these to my Son and he was very happy.

Thanks.