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how can i improve this and any ideas for improving my writing in general? In the dark I could make out the faint outline of the town, it seemed a million miles from here. A few friendly lights still glowed through the storm.
I'd only ever visited it a few times before; I remember the first time most vividly. I must have been about five or six at the time, I was almost lost in the sea of giants surrounding me. I was following the giant in front of me, my father; he had hold of my hand and was pulling me along the path that he had created as he rudely shoved people out of his way.