Can you advise on my covering letter

[angel21]

Good or bad

Anything to change or word differentl? Are there too many sentences beginning with 'I' etc. Many thanks


Dear ________

Re: Conference Administrator Vacancy

I am writing to apply for the above vacancy and enclose an up to date copy of my CV.

I have 5 years admin experience as well as some customer service experience. I have good keyboard and computer skills including knowledge of Microsoft Word and Excel, as well as a polite telephone manner.

My strengths are having a keen eye for detail, being enthusiastic and I am also a fast learner.

The idea of organising conferences appeals to me as I enjoy being organised and efficient and this role would give me the opportunity to utilize and develop my skills further. I enjoy knowing my individual effort contributes to the success of a company as part of a team.

I am currently living in ________ but am looking to relocate to _______ as soon as possible.

I hope you will consider me for this role and I look forward to hearing from you shortly.


Yours sincerely,



_______


Enc.

[mrs.chappie]

Any particular type of potato, whiffs?

Anyhoo, shurrrup. She's only asking for advice.

[whifffey]

Why is "relocate" posh? It is 100% bull$hite in every single case. There is NEVER an instance where relocate is preferable to move. Unless you want to end up in a boring office job with a load of jargon-bound morons.

It Is MOVE, it is never RELOCATE.

[angel21]

Right I get it Whiff - you are just very against jargon!

I know what you mean as I am really a plain and simple straight talking no bulls1t girl

Dot - you are so good at this. Right I'm off to do a bit (well....a lot) of editing now.

Thanks hunnikins xxx

[angel21]

p.s - I could feel the passion oozing out of you're post whiffey.......or should that be coming out of lol ;-)

[whifffey]

No, oozing is fine, a necessary consequence of age.

[angel21]

lol x :-)