ChatterBank1 min ago
Hi, advice needed please?? x
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My mum has been applying for jobs for the past year, but unfortunately hasn't got one yet.
This is her covering letter with any emails she has sent: -
Good Morning,
Please find attached my CV in relation to the position I have seen advertised on the Job Website.
I have experience in dealing with customers over the telephone and face to face on a daily basis. I have a polite, confident and professional manner that feel would fit within this role.
I am a hard worker and have a very flexible approach to my work. Given the opportunity, I can be an excellent worker and asset to the company.
I am available to start work immediately and can work any hours.
I hope to hear from you.
Many thanks
What do you think? Can it be improved?
This is her covering letter with any emails she has sent: -
Good Morning,
Please find attached my CV in relation to the position I have seen advertised on the Job Website.
I have experience in dealing with customers over the telephone and face to face on a daily basis. I have a polite, confident and professional manner that feel would fit within this role.
I am a hard worker and have a very flexible approach to my work. Given the opportunity, I can be an excellent worker and asset to the company.
I am available to start work immediately and can work any hours.
I hope to hear from you.
Many thanks
What do you think? Can it be improved?
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For more on marking an answer as the "Best Answer", please visit our FAQ.If I'm completely honest, I don't think this letter is very professional. Firstly, switch the "Good morning" to "Dear sir/Madam/Mr...."
I would also put something in there about having the right skills and experience required for this role, rather than just saying you are polite and confident.
I would also leave out the "hard worker" bit and also the "I am available to start work immediately and can work any hours".
Maybe change that for something like " I am available for interview at your convenience and, due to having no other work commitments, I am very flexible with regards to working hours"... or something like that.
End the letter with something along the lines of "I look forward to hearing from you shortly. Yours sincerely...."
"Many thanks" sounds a bit casual.
Also, maybe follow up every email with a call, a couple of days later.
Hope this helps :)
I would also put something in there about having the right skills and experience required for this role, rather than just saying you are polite and confident.
I would also leave out the "hard worker" bit and also the "I am available to start work immediately and can work any hours".
Maybe change that for something like " I am available for interview at your convenience and, due to having no other work commitments, I am very flexible with regards to working hours"... or something like that.
End the letter with something along the lines of "I look forward to hearing from you shortly. Yours sincerely...."
"Many thanks" sounds a bit casual.
Also, maybe follow up every email with a call, a couple of days later.
Hope this helps :)
I am a hard worker and have a very flexible approach to my work. Given the opportunity, I can be an excellent worker and asset to the company.
This is repeating itself. Would change to "I am a hard worker with a very flexible approach to requirements and given the opportunity I could be an asset to your company. (and here you could even change to the company name like an asset to Matalan.....)
This is repeating itself. Would change to "I am a hard worker with a very flexible approach to requirements and given the opportunity I could be an asset to your company. (and here you could even change to the company name like an asset to Matalan.....)
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