this song i wrote i need advice again lol!

[lauratwentyeight]

i know im a pain in the arse lol! is this to repetitive like unbearable? i can only play so much so im limited and this is all ive got lol! god bless you if u can help lol thanks lol ;))

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KDpnTiAFBNc

[EvianBaby]

I felt like it was building up to something that didn't come. Like a big chorus. Sorry if that doesn't sound very nice. You have a Lovely voice.

[lauratwentyeight]

evian baby, thanks alot yeah its basically 2 verses a bridge and an outro lol! thats all i had lol, thankyou very much for your geedback thats how i learn lol ;))) x

[tenrec]

Agree with Evian. Good luck.