Thoughts On My Song?

[river454]

I know perhaps I shouldn't promote on here. But really want to hear what people think. The song is called "A Tale Of Tragic Love In London" and is a romantic tragedy song about grief and loss. I'm a song writer currently aiming to put a band together in London.

[maggiebee]

2 days after the Queen has died. Really?

[river454]

how do you mean? are you saying we should all sit inside our rooms and do nothing because the queen has died? sorry i'm not sure I see where you are coming from.

[choux]

I think it might take more than 2 days to compose, write lyrics and book a recording studio, but I am no expert. Life goes on for all of us.

river, I am old and have partial hearing so found it rather difficult to get all the lyrics which came over to me as a bit echoey. The overall effect was quite pleasant, sorry I cannot be more positive than that.
Good luck :)

[Boto]

Couldn’t understand/hear the words, and I’m not deaf.

[Chipchopper]

Very good, the vocals could be a bit clearer, but that could be me.
Keep at it and good luck

[THECORBYLOON]

Does the second line mention a, "nuclear door"?

[Canary42]

Perhaps if you rigged the recording equipment up properly so the voice was prominent, not the strings, I could judge it - but that version is a badly-recorded mess, sorry.

[royfromaus]

All a bit busker-esque

You're no songwriter.

[LadyCG]

I have to agree with Roy, I'm afraid.

[river454]

Hi Roy... How do you mean busker esque? Interersting as I admit the recording cld be poor here and my vox are perhaps not incredible. But actually the one thing I have been complimented the most on is my songwriting so I find this an interesting criticism. But thanks :) Would love to hear how you mean by busker esque tho?

[piggynose]

For Funks Sake, busker esque must surely mean you are the kind of musician found in the street playing for loose change! Unless I'm mistaken.

[royfromaus]

If you form a band I hope you do it for the enjoyment it will give you, because you will never make any decent money from it.

Nonetheless all the best.

[THECORBYLOON]

What about my question regarding "nuclear door"?

[JimF]

Nuclear dawn, I think.

[river454]

How do you mean roy? as in on my vocals??

But I mean if you're merely judging based on the simply the recording quality or the fact that I'm one person with a guitar then all it demonstrates is that you are not an artist and have absolutely no idea on how art/music operates :)

[royfromaus]

You're right.

You're probably ready to form the new Beatles and conquer the world...crack on lad, no time to waste.

[royfromaus]

Oh yeah

:o)

[royfromaus]

Which reminds me that I was sat in the company of Pete Best last week (lovely bloke) and didn't appear to old any grudges to his old bandmates.

[THECORBYLOON]

JIM, it sounds like, "I see you standing by the nuclear door" to me.